Story Arc: Andrea is going to/at a Halloween party that she doesn't really seem to want to be at, all she cares about is getting drunk. She has an interaction with a guy, Shane, who she seems to have had a 'thing' with in the past - he tries to give her a birthday present, but all she wants are drugs. She leaves the party and follows some mysterious directions that were given to her in an envelope by Shane, and she ends up at a house where he has prepared a surprise movie marathon for her.
Compliments: Hilarious title! You have good moments of humor throughout the story - details like, the flask that says "Girls With Class Don't Need a Glass", and Andrea's internal thoughts/opinions on other people. I also liked the specific details of the movie titles and script quotes in dialogue.
Revisions: Overall, I just don't get a sense of believability in this piece. Andrea seems almost too detached from everything and everyone around her, especially since we have almost zero background on her character. And I just felt that the introductions of the drugs was too much to be real - like, I know it happens, but drinking and smoking is more believable than doing X. I'd be really interested in seeing more of this relationship between Shane and Andrea - there is obviously history, but what is it?? Why does she feel the need to go hook up with that rando in her car? I don't understand her motivations, and I think just because she was drinking isn't a good enough motive. I find the idea of her following the mysterious directions in the envelope really interesting and I think there could be more done with that - like maybe almost like a scavenger hunt to find Shane. I like the ending because it's sweet, but the rest of the story doesn't seem to be building to that ending the way it is now.
A great start, just explore your options and characters even more! :)
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