Workshop: Taylor's "Love Thy Enemy"

Story Arc: This story is about a girl who gets kidnapped by 'the devil' and is kept in a cabin for 18 days.  'The devil' tortures and deforms her so that she will be ugly, and he wants her to do the same to him - but she won't. Finally, she ties up 'the devil' and it seems she might give in, but she only forgives him and leaves. 

Compliments: You did really well introducing and keeping up the level of tension throughout the whole piece. There was always a sense of suspense when it came to whether she was going to give into the temptations presented to her.  The fact that she never gave into these temptations - almost, but not quite - really characterized her as human. The details are good and clear - I can visualize pretty much everything happening really well! Also, you have a good sense of time in your writing. You know how to pass time without being too sudden or confusing.

Revisions: I would have liked to see more back story in this character - how did she come to be here exactly? How does she know this 'devil'?  It's hard for me to absolutely believe in this situation presented - I know horrible things like this happen in real life, but back story leading up to this situation would make it even more realistic. Overall, it felt like a story focusing too much on a message and not enough on the plot and characters themselves.  The biblical context is a little too overbearing, in my opinion, I would have enjoyed something more subtle - make it so I don't quite see the biblical connection until the very end when she quotes the bible (I'm assuming).  Then that becomes a enjoyable discovery of another layer of context!  

Really well written, Taylor!