Story Arc: The story begins with the readers being introduced to an unusual homeless man named Levi who plays cards on the curb, then to a young man named Roman who stutters. Roman meet-cutes a quirky girl named Sawyer in a coffee/tea shop and they hit it off wonderfully, but go their separate ways. The two of them meet up again by a chance visit to play cards with Levi. They leave Levi and Sawyer asks Roman to be her date to a wedding and Roman reveals that Levi wants him to build a coffin.
Compliments: I absolutely love this story! It's really cute, well-written, quirky, and full of great details and characterization. I thought the story progressed logically and I was never thrown off by changes in time. I also felt like the dialogue was really realistic and interesting. Overall, I liked that your story is familiar, yet original - your characterization and details make a normal boy-meets-girl story really fresh!!
Revisions: I wanted to know more of Sawyer's backstory, just because she is such a unique, fun character and I'd like to know what influenced her to be the way she is. I also felt like there was more significance to Levi's coffin then what was given - maybe he should know he's really sick or is going to kill himself or something, rather than 'just in case.' Be careful about long stretches of dialogue and descriptions without action or movement.
Overall - such an entertaining story, I would absolutely love to read more, definitely novel potential here! :)
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