Workshop: Morgan's "Secrets of Cooking"

Story Arc: Emma and her husband, Tim, are getting ready for a his parents to come over for dinner and Emma's freaking out a little bit. The in laws arrive and they all have dinner, and everyone gets along. After dinner, in the kitchen, Caroline (the mother inlaw) praises Emma's cooking and reveals that she herself can't actually cook like everyone thought! 

Compliments: I really enjoyed the relationship shown between Emma and Tim! They seemed realistic together - Emma shouting at him to lint roll everything and him being like really? -  that and other little moments are really telling of their dynamic. You also had a good sense of humor throughout, nothing too cheesy but still got the character's personality to show through. 

Revisions: Be careful of 'movie dialogue'- I liked your dialogue because I thought it characterized Emma well, but I think the overall tone and word choice of the interactions between the characters are a little movie-like and not totally realistic, mainly between Emma and Caroline. There are some grammatical errors - quotation punctuation, comma errors, contractions - simple things to be changed. Overall, I would have liked to see this pressing problem of impressing the mother-in-law to be more pressing. Emma and Caroline seem to have a good relationship, no obvious tension or bitterness or anything like that, and I think there should be a true reason for wanting to impress her, besides her being her mother-in-law. However, be careful not to make this relationship too cliche - everyone's seen Monster In-Law, everyone's heard stories of mother in- laws not liking their daughter in-laws - so keep it unique! 

     Overall, this is a cute story and a great start!